Origins

Celu · 1 Origins 27th July 2011, 2:21 pm

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First topic message reminder :

What is Origins?

Origins is a story serial created for Ancient Chronicle, produced by Mata Nui Inc. It entails in the story of the creation of Spherus Magna, and after when three kingdoms ruled the planet. Not all is perfect when the Great Beings arrive, and havoc breaks out. Want to see the whole story, then read Origins today!

Who's behind Origins?

Mata Nui Inc is behind Origins, who is part of the project Ancient Chronicle, but only a few people are the writers of this magnificent story. They are led by Celu, the founder of Mata Nui Inc and Rising Moon, a great writer and leader of Worldscape.

Authors
Celupnus
Rising Moon
Zarayna: The Quiet Light
Tyler Durden
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GoldenTahu · 51 Re: Origins 13th August 2011, 12:24 am

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Bioran/Purmou, could you re-upload the image?

Legolover-361 · 52 Re: Origins 9th November 2011, 7:54 pm

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I have Origins Chapters 4, 5, and 6 -- I was actually the one to convert them to HTML Tongue

-- but I need Chapter 3 to upload to the website. Does anyone have a copy of the HTML version?

Riglax · 53 Re: Origins 10th November 2011, 4:57 am

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I'm going to post release dates for the chapters soon.

But oh! What's this? Is this.... Chapter Three of Origins in HTML?

Spoiler:

Code:: Origins - Chapter Three We proceeded with stealthy caution, avoiding the eye of the beings. I was overcome by a sort of mental sensation, and-- My unvoiced suspicious were confirmed when one of the titans peered over at us with a swift man of his neck. I swear I stared death in the eye...and then he nodded politely and wordlessly resumed screwing around with the heap of technology on the ground. I sensed a similar miserable confusion in the others. “Come join us, friends!" I blinked. “We come in peace, we mean no harm to you or your home.” Words spewed out of my mouth while my brain caught up with events. "Who--what--who are you? No harm? How can we trust you? Who--how--wha...Why are you here?" Not one of my brighter moments. Pior articulated as much. I ignored him, stifled the urge to turn his face inside-out. “I am Heremus. I am of the elders among us Great Beings." The being did not turn from his work. Great Beings. Go figure. I had the vague feeling he'd sneaked into my mind and pulled out that title. Which, at very least, made it sound a bit less self-absorbed. "I'd really like to look at your machines!" Raginus blurted , jittery. I'd never seen him this giddy--he acted as if it was wrong. I giggle a bit, what I thought was to myself. Arai cast me a degrading expression. I waved it off. Heremus turned, now. His expression was cheerful, almost uplifting of my own spirits. Almost. I was pretty far down running around life-threatening areas with this zoo of buffoons, and not even a smile of that disarming caliber of sheer innocent, warm accommodation would raise me up entirely. "I like your enthusiasm, youth." Raginus was not a youth. "Come enter our workplace, all of you!" A simultaneous cry of 'Yes!' rang out. Ever-cautious but aware protest would do me no good--especially considering the possibility these guys were actually alright, and I ended up getting on their bad side--my hand did not fall from the grip of my blade in its sheath, ready to shed blood at a moment's notice. Pravu eyed it and nodded approvingly. The man had a decent battle instinct, even if that was as far as he went. Pior, of course, was apparently taken aback by Heremus's welcoming gesture. "...I think I'll be heading back to Roxtus. I'll check on progress there." For once Pior was making sense, if for the wrong reasons. "Yeah, I'll go with him.” Pravu nodded several times. Thought the guy was going to dislocate his neck. "Yeah, boss--uh, bosses, I'm going with 'em. Be too uncufferble being the only non-king and all." Raginus nodded obliviously, though once he processed it he peered up from obsessing over some glowing hunk of crimson steel. Thing looked like nothing I've ever seen in nightmares. "Alright, be on your way..." He looked me straight in the eye. His eyes were a deep, deep crimson, like a fiery ocean...they were calm, hypnotizing, like the fire that sets the night ablaze and envelops you in its bliss. I felt enveloped in bliss... They tell me he told me to be careful. We traveled Roxtus-ward. I left with the impression this would all be smooth sailing. As it turned out, that impression was exactly wrong. On the nose. <center>***</center> Armatus lurked the halls of the alien Tower in naive amazement, his jaw gaping. White hair spurted from his wrinkled scalp and fell, unkempt, as an animal. Eras gone had passed through his eyes, and still they remained soulless holes. Back arched over, the sinews of his neck were stretched to their limit as he craned to glimpse at the otherworldly glory. The dark threads of brilliance--insane, twisted brilliance--weaved through themselves and back again in patternless madness. His mind was not his own. It had been lost to the darkness of obliviousness before the days had been numbered. Yet still it weaved threads through his quivering, twitching skull, guided by those invisible demons it is said all good men must face down. The wicked do not have to bear such menial burdens. The demons are their friends. The demons stalk the shadows cast by those relics of evil, of power. The Tower is home to the archaic, is the core of power. The hermit walks in the shadow of those that walk in the shadows. <center>***</center> Yesterday's events still was upsetting me. The paranoid sensation of another mind buried somewhere in mine refused to be shaken. I shivered on several occasions, which prompted high-pitched chuckles from Pior and repeated inquiries of 'Are you okay?' from the Sea Kingdom General, as if he'd forgotten the last answer. He had a good heart, Pravu. It was the brain that got on my nerves. Paranoia spawns paranoia. Theories swirled in my mind, some rational, others undeserving of being labelled even remotely logical. They ranged from attempting to swindle the military's secrets to the desire to seduce my to disembodied aliens who had sneaked aboard the ship of the 'Great Beings' to find fleshy hosts for their consciousnesses. I felt an awkward and personal vulnerability upon the realization that not only what I struck utterly clueless and currently possessed no means of further uncovering the mystery of the strangers, but the presence in my head could not be rejected. I did not even know if whatever it was was conscious I knew. I wondered, briefly, if my associate generals should be informed of my state, as it may be a potential threat to the security of all species, which then prompted the curiosity as to whether they felt a similar intrusion. I decided against it. The two of them are too stupid to be aware of yesterday's dinner leaving their digestive tract. For once, I had a lot of time to think--today was battle training, required of all soldiers, a regimen I had not practiced in a long while--so naturally, it had to be inconveniently timed when all my thoughts were centered around irrational, baseless paranoia. At least it helped my training. I work best when I do not ponder on my movements and simply let my body flow. I must admit I am quite naturally inclined toward combat--my body moves as one of liquid, elastic and poised. A figure became visible in the distance. I squinted--we were in the isolation of the desert, and the noon sun blazed dazzlingly above. The silhouette of a jogging--no, sprinting--Agori became clarified. Poor guy had no animal. Pravu took advantage and abruptly knocked the wind out of me and sent me tumbling flat on my butt. Pior started preaching about attention, stopped when he noticed the Agori. He ran close enough for us to hear him. I could make out heaving, rapid panting. The stench of sweat entered my nostrils, to which we all had visible reactions. Which was saying something, us being out in the battlefield twenty four-seven. An Agori of my own fire tribe. He began waving a letter and collapsed at our feet. "My lords...My generals, sirs...sirs and madam...I wish to--" "Whoa there, take it easy, brother." Pior took his hand and cast his shadow over him to ward off the heat, which frankly didn't do much considering how skinny it was. "Do you need rest?" God, Pravu, shut up. I snatched up the envelope and tried opening it. It was crudely sealed. Too much adhesive, all over the place. I resorted to ripping it open and tore the letter within, which didn't matter much since the only three words within were gigantic. Don't trust them.

Okay, that came out incredibly silly. I should probably have said I'm done doing other trash so I can now do MNI trash.

GoldenTahu · 54 Re: Origins 10th November 2011, 3:57 pm

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HahliNuva · 55 Re: Origins 16th November 2011, 1:28 pm

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I'm sorry if it's a bit late to point this out, but I was reading Chapter Two and noticed quite a few grammatical errors which, looking back at my private messages, were not there when RM sent it to me to edit nor when I sent it to Celu to post in the Origins Chapters topic. And seeing as it was posted in the aforementioned topic, I have a question: why was a different version posted here?

GoldenTahu · 56 Re: Origins 16th January 2012, 11:01 pm

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Just to make sure: Is the Origins topic on Bzp? And what excuse do we have for not posting all the finished chapters on our site?

Riglax · 57 Re: Origins 17th January 2012, 3:57 pm

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Origins topic...?

If you mean an AC Topic, I'm going to post it once Bzpower puts up KJP's return. As Purmou has pretty much disappeared, the KJ Topic is not happening anytime soon.

Since I'm the only active person that can put them up right now, it's been getting a little sidetracked most of the time. Y'know, TGC and all. I'll be sure to code the chapters and post them in the next week.

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