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TGC - Chapter 3

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1TGC - Chapter 3 Empty TGC - Chapter 3 2nd October 2011, 3:53 pm

Captain Marvel

Captain Marvel

MNI Author, MOCist, Musician

MNI Author, MOCist, Musician

So, I finally got this up. It's not quite completely proofread yet, and I may be lacking in terms of description, but at least I got it done, right? I can proofread it if it's not too much trouble.

Spoiler:

Alright, so I have a question. Some of the people's descriptions of the characters may be different, so when we're finalizing all the chapters we need to check them against each other.

-CM

2TGC - Chapter 3 Empty Re: TGC - Chapter 3 18th March 2012, 12:36 am

Legolover-361

Legolover-361

MNI COO

MNI COO

At long last -- not to mention a day overdue -- here is an edited version of The Grand Creation, Chapter 3. I apologize for the massive amounts of edits I bestowed upon the chapter; I started getting really picky. Tongue

Spoiler:

3TGC - Chapter 3 Empty Re: TGC - Chapter 3 18th March 2012, 8:03 pm

Riglax

Riglax

MNI CEO

MNI CEO

Spoiler:

Minor edits to fix some stuff. This is approved, and I would like to thank Marvel and LL for it.

Now let's hope to find Marvel to post this on TGC Topic. XD

4TGC - Chapter 3 Empty Re: TGC - Chapter 3 25th March 2012, 12:45 am

ValkyrieLightDragon

ValkyrieLightDragon

MNI Conceptual Artist

MNI Conceptual Artist

Here I come again:


"And here's my that man I was talking about. Avarus". Either 'my' or 'that'. Choose one, remove the other.

"be discussed after all other work is finished."/font]": Ooops, what happened with the '/font]' here?

" "No, my lord. Please enlighten me.”[/font]": Again, something went wrong with the formatting language here.

". “And then they die.”[/font]" Same thing again.

"could also be political sabotage.” Pomerax": replace the fullstop before the end of the quote with a comma.

" I’m showing the Elder,” said Raanu,": opening quotations are missing.

"Galintin can explain this to you better than I am": 'better than I can'.

"He struck the fall wall and fell to his knees": 'far' instead of 'fall'.

"several times but being blocked, shed gave up": 'she'. No need for the 'd' at the end.


That's all. Exciting chapter. Interesting characters. Smile I'm enjoying it whilst I'm correcting.

5TGC - Chapter 3 Empty Re: TGC - Chapter 3 25th March 2012, 2:35 pm

Riglax

Riglax

MNI CEO

MNI CEO

ValkyrieLightDragon wrote:Here I come again:


"And here's my that man I was talking about. Avarus". Either 'my' or 'that'. Choose one, remove the other.

"be discussed after all other work is finished."/font]": Ooops, what happened with the '/font]' here?

" "No, my lord. Please enlighten me.”[/font]": Again, something went wrong with the formatting language here.

". “And then they die.”[/font]" Same thing again.

"could also be political sabotage.” Pomerax": replace the fullstop before the end of the quote with a comma.

" I’m showing the Elder,” said Raanu,": opening quotations are missing.

"Galintin can explain this to you better than I am": 'better than I can'.

"He struck the fall wall and fell to his knees": 'far' instead of 'fall'.

"several times but being blocked, shed gave up": 'she'. No need for the 'd' at the end.


That's all. Exciting chapter. Interesting characters. Smile I'm enjoying it whilst I'm correcting.


Spoiler:


And it's edit and finished again!

Again, thanks for the feedback; LL's Microsoft Word decided to add an arial font code around each line, thus I had to manually remove them. I must have missed those.



Last edited by Legolover-361 on 29th March 2012, 11:09 am; edited 1 time in total (Reason for editing : The spoiler box wasn't opening for me. I wanted to see if I could fix it. ~Legolover-361)

6TGC - Chapter 3 Empty Re: TGC - Chapter 3 1st April 2012, 9:15 am

ValkyrieLightDragon

ValkyrieLightDragon

MNI Conceptual Artist

MNI Conceptual Artist

No problem. Smile I gladly contribute (even if it's only correcting and making posters. Tongue)

I'll see if I can correct the rest of the chapters currently posted, and I'll record the ebooks afterwards too. Smile

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